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The following information is for Ms. LaBeau's 1st and 5th period English 1 (E102) courses at Fremd HS for the 2008-09 school year.
Suggested Movies (From Class)
- "Peaceful Warrior"
- "Vantage Point"
- "Butterfly Effect"
- "What the Bleep Do We Know"
- "Freak, the Mighty"
Labels
- book fair (1)
- Mythology (1)
- Of Mice and Men (3)
- poetry (4)
- quiz (1)
- raisin in the sun (1)
- reading_strategies (4)
- short stories (7)
- StudySkills (6)
- test taking strategies (2)
- writing (6)
- writing strategies (1)
141 comments:
In the packet, on the page with the outline. what does roman numeral 5 mean?
for the body paragraphs, do we have to do one paragraph on how it relates to humanity with the book and then another paragraph on how it relates to humanity with me?
Do we have to put the last name of the author in the quote?
Ex. "She had no evening clothes,
no jewels, nothing. But those were the things she wanted; she felt that was the kind of life for her" (Maupassant 161).
The STRUCTURE I gave in outline form has V as "conclusion". The Roman Numeral is just the numbered order for the next section of your paper.
BODY PARAGRAPHS: The enire paper should discuss how the story reveals your one aspect of humanity. SO, it should NOT be one paragraph on humanity and one paragraph on a personal connection. The personal connection will be one example in one of your paragraphs.
For the the article "the secrets of storytelling", when we write the name of the article should we put Jeremy Hsu's name in parentheses after the name of the article that we put in ""
I mean the roman numeral 4.
When we show examples from the story, do we have to write the quote? or can we just explain what happened in the story?
The LAST NAME of the author belongs inside the citation quotes, most of the time. You only put the page number when the author is already mentioned in your sentence. Since you have already listed the name, you do not need to repeat it in the () of the citation.
are we working on our body parragraph or are we just revising our intro ?
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hey do we have to make titles for every paragraph that we turn in?
what is a good quote from the storytelling article related to "What would you be able to give for someone you truly love?"
STORYTELLING ARTICLE CITATIONS: If you do not mention the author's name in your sentence, put his last name in front of the page number inside the paranthesis:
ljfljoeuoitue" (Hsu 46).
Otherwise, if you put his name in your sentence, just the page number: According to Jeremey Hsu's article, "fjljflej" (46).
hi
In our Intro what are the check marks?
ROMAN NUMERAL IV:
Remember that I just supplied a sample structure; you are supplying the information, and everyone's will be a little different. SO, IV-you may have another main point to write about, you may not, hence, "another?"
When we show examples from the story, do we have to write the quote? or can we just explain what happened in the story?
I meant the body paragraph
STORY EXAMPLES:
They do not have to be lines from the story. They do have to be specific enough in your use of them to be concrete, specific examples.
How do we put in the header?
I'm confused
does the period go before or after the quote marks
check marks in my grading are "good point" indicators.
Joe, keep on looking to find your quote! Maybe someone else will respond to your question!
Hi back to you!
do we have to double space in our writing/typing
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CITATION: period goes after the paranthesis..... "( ).
HEADER: go to 'view' and then 'header' ...you can tab over and type your last name, space bar, and use the mouse to click the icon that will insert the proper page number.
TITLE: You only title your paper, not each paragraph. The title should be original for your orignal essay.
Do we have to put the storytelling article quotes in the body paragraph?
does there have to be a quote in every body paragraph ?
Joe, a good quote from the storytelling article related to "What would you be able to give for someone you truly love?" would probably have something to do with either the boy/ girl stuff on pg. 50, or something from the behavior stuff in the last 2 paragraphs of pg. 51
STORYTELLING ARTICLE QUOTES: I required one in the introduction. If you use more from the article, it is your choice. You do not HAVE to put them in your body paragraphs, but if they fit and you explain them and it suits your writing to make it better, you can.
Where do we save the document so we can open it, at home, off the Fremd website?
Do we have to double space between lines in our whole paper??????????
ahh...i found one woohhh......hahahahaha thanks
SAVEing: When you save to your 'H:' drive, you can access it from home via the www.fhs.d211.org site by clicking on "Netstorage" and following the directions.
is the H drive the drive with our name?
DOUBLE SPACE: Your entire paper. No quadruple spacing. Make it all look the same.
EXCELLENT helping one another by answering some of these posts! Good cooperation!
is it ms. or mrs. labeau
could we save to the computer and then bring a usb drive next time
it is ms. i think. that is what i put on my paper
for a quote from the book, do we have to put the "quote" the "story" then (page number)?
Ms. LaBeau.
SAVE-Yes, bring a usb tomorrow. OR use Netstorage.
hi!!!! haha
in class tomorrow, will we have time to write or start our body paragraphs?
I know you want to be, Like Joey G.
I know you want to be, Like Joey G.
I know you want to be, Like Joey G.
what do u put for the titles for each thing think the body paragraphs??????????????
Wednesday we have computer lab time, I believe, to continue to write; otherwise, we will write in class.
Body paragraphs do not have titles for the paragraph. I'm not sure what Mike W is asking...
For the body paragraphs, is one paragraph supposed to be the connection to yourself?
Personal connections are not an entire paragraph part of your essay. It is one example, specific in a part of your paper.
hey, Ms. LaBeau ^.^ when you said "it should NOT be one paragraph on humanity and one paragraph on a personal connection." did you mean that it should all be about humanity? i understand that we should have connections in every paragraph, but can we have one paragraph talking directly about the story and humanity, and another talking directly about storytelling and humanity; sorry if this doesn't make sense >.<
Is this a more understandable theory?
The humanity is shown through the kings barbarities and the princesses choice between love or to betray.
I have thought of another question
Their are some ideas in my paper that are easily compaered to todays society. Can we add a sentence on to the end of that idea about todays society?
Is there anything due tomorrow?
How do we put the last name and page number in the margin?
is it okay if we spend most of the first body paragraph explaining the story for clarity ?
how many sentences should be in a body paragraph?
Sarah, see me on your thesis; I've some re-wording suggestions.
DUE-the next due date is Thursday, for the final draft of the entire paper
HEADER-see earlier comment post
BODY PARAGRAPHS- # of sentences may vary...consider MEL-Con or a modified MEL-Con if you are stuck. SUMAMRY should not be an entire paragraph. Sentences about the story will be necessary, but, like the summer reading, I don't want a summary of the story; I want your analysis of the story. SO, a body paragraph should not be just a summary.
CONNECTING TO TODAY- YES, state the connection you see; that would be wonderful!
i have a mac computer and i do not know how to make the margian 1"?
how do i say, "it's not easy to give up your most prized possession for someone you love." without saying you? or can i do that?
do i have to put a quote from the storytelling article in my essay or does a quote from the text work just as well?
when the conclusions were corrected, what does it mean when there is a squigly line under a phrase.
On my paper i wrote "... had gotten rid of..." and it had a squigly line under it. What does that mean?
Ms. Labeau, I was looking at my conclusion quickly and I can't figure out how to edit the last sentence to make it less confusing (I got a 3 on it). Did you want me to explain it more, or should I just reword it?
"Harsh as it may seem, every single person does this; the only difference is the perspective you have."
Thanks in advance.
for the header how do we put our last name and page number in the margin?
my thesis: humanity would scarfice anything just to show someone how much they loved them
-can my subpoints be:
1. Della: why and how della gave up \her possesion
2. Jim why and how jim gave up his posseion
nevermind about the squiggly line
In the conclusion paragraph can I use the words "In conclusion", or would that not be a good phrase to use?
dear ms. labeau,
I was just wondering what the notes on the essay meant when they said:
(clarity)=>explain
=>what you mean
(proof)=>example
=>show example
(clarity)=>explain example
=>links<->*focus
sincerely,
Ethan Wieczorek
how do we use melcon for the 2 main paragraphs?
can i have a text to text connnection?
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my thesis: humanity would scarfice anything just to show someone how much they loved them
-can my subpoints be:
1. Della: why and how della gave up \her possesion
2. Jim why and how jim gave up his posseion
Ms.LaBeau,
You already graded my conclusion paragraph. Should i still keep typing it like you said or not because you graded it?
Sincerly,
Steven Dodgen
I'm at home and I'm going to do the rest of my paper but i did most of the work in school and I'm having trouble trying to get my paper onto this computer i think I'm doing something wrong how do i get it on my computer?
do we need to have a bibliography for our essay tomorrow?
Ms. LaBeau,
when I was talking about the notes I meant the notes for the body paragraphs, not the notes for the whole paper itself. (even though the body paragraphs are part of the whole paper
is this a good opening for a bosy paragraph. '“Dogstar” first shows a human’s capacity for love when the narrator sees Laika abandoned on the side of the road as he is going to the scientific laboratory, and how he wants to keep on driving but his heart won’t let him, and the story even says “Though I have never liked dogs, or indeed any animals, it was impossible to leave this helpless little creature to the mercy of passing cars” (pg. 34, column 1).'
is a four paragraph essay okay
What is the thesis sub-point?
sorry for asking late, but what does "linking explanation" mean
can the personal example/ connection be in your final thought (like using your own experiences to make the audience think about what you said).
p.s. you should think about finding a way to use blogger.com to clear al of the comments.
p.s.s. sorry for being so late to ask
STEPHEN -conclusion is done; just the final paper tomorrow.
BIBLIOGRAPHY-is not needed for Thursday.
NETSTORAGE- keep trying; it does work...another emailed trouble, but then got it to work.
PARAGRAPHS-you need to have as many as it takes to successfully defend, explain, and support your concept/thesis.
"LINKING/EXPLANATION"-depending on what you are looking at.....linking is a sentence that links the point/idea/example to the main point or thesis, it can also be a sentence that bridges two other ideas; explanation means a sentence that explains the previous example.
SUB-POINT-I'm not sure what you're referring to, Ken. Your thesis is done , isn't it? The sub point in refernce may be one of the main points you will write about to help support your thesis.
Jack, i believe that that means that means to explain your link to the story
Ethan, yes. As for ealier comments, my hope is that people will read them for answers that I've already answered, at least for now. But I appreciate your suggestion for making this easier to use for all of us.
thank you. i've been on the computer since 5:30, and i got a lot don in study hall.
p.s. thanks for the pass
so if i was writing on gift of the magi, and my 1st body paragrapf is basically introducing Della. what would a linking explanation sentence be?
I had trouble with the header and their has to be a box.
Jack, I'd have to be clear on more of your paper, but the linking needs to be direct statements saying clearly how Della (more specific --whate ever aspect you are addressing in the 1st paragraph)...and saying HOW is ties back to your main point or thesis.
Ken, wasn't the problem with your hearder when I marked on it the "#" you had? Can't you just backspace it away? Problem Solve!
maybe you should clear it when we get done with short stories. (but this is just a suggestion)
is this okay for a citation. ""(pg. #, column #
)
alright, so if my aspect of humanity thingy is sacrifice, then i would have to show how she shows sacrifice?????
CITATIONS: "ldjflsdjfldjflj ldjfslj kfeijbeo kdjvwojveo " ({page number}). No column number needed.
And, Ethan, good idea on the clean up of the comments. They are GREAT for review here and now. Later , I will set it so fewer appear on the screen list at once. Fortunately, the blog is still clean, just the growing number of smart freshman using the resource!
YES, JACK!!! I do believe you got it! :)
the wrd verifacashun thngy tkes way 2 mch of my tme
exactly, or maybe you can just make a separate comment sheet for when we start a new subject
"the wrd verifacashun thngy tkes way 2 mch of my tme"
....SO cracked me up!! I needed the laugh, thanks! Ah, stress relief. Now, I'm ready for more!
can you give me an example of how to transition to my next idea
Jack, I can , but it is difficult w/o specifics.
LINK EXAMPLE BETWEEN IDEAS: apple to orange...they are both fruits, so a sentence about fruits between the specific sentences about each separate fruit. Remember how we talked about the connection between the "how to write a conclusion" and the "turkey meat wrapped pickle"? We talked about how we could connect them ---LINK them. That is how to transition between ideas: what do they have in common for your purpose?
im gonna fail
in my body paragraph, do i talk about the aspects of humanity that the characters show or not?
Jack, your not alone. Me as well
JACK! You are NOT going to fail. First, your going to take a LONG, DEEP, and slow breath. Then you are going to get a big drink of water, not pop or juice, plain water. If you were not in the class connecting the conclusion to the pickle thing, we connected something else. Don't even try to think on that.
NOW, DRINK OF WATER; then, read your intro and conclusion that you already have cleaned up and mostly ready to go. That is a huge chunk aleardy done.
CHECK what the two or three different pieces you have to explain/discuss for your thesis to be proven. These will be your main ideas/points for each body paragraph on your paper. Simple. IF you're stuck, look at the examples you already chose on the prewriting sheet of the packet; they can "tell" you what you have in your brain already -to put on the paper. One example from the story per paragraph is all you need (though, yes, you could have more than one).
TAKE ANOTHER DRINK OF WATER.
BREATHE. Is the TV and music turned off? good.
It is okay if you are using MEL-CON if the MEL-CON is not exact. I will not be checking the MELELELEL... just reading for flow.
Before you know it, you'll be done.
What do we dowhen we link to the thesis
OMG i got it thx every1 for the help c u guys 2morrow!!!!
;)
I'm FREAKING OUT!!!!!!!
My comment got lost!!! AURGH.
OK, Stephen, yes , the body paragraphs will have 'humanity' in them. Remember that the paper is in response to the prompt in the packet. Basically, what does the story show us about humanity (the specific aspect you picked).
Ken, when you link? like when you're done? {you celebrate!} Try a "This shows..." if you are really lost.
Ms. LaBeau
Do we need a bibliography?
I'm confused and i mean in the body paragraph
YEA!!!!! JACK! It was the drink of water, wasn't it?
Ken, see the long post to Jack. Or, Jack, advise Ken.
Freaking out is normal. I freaked on the ridiculously long paper I did last year, too. Then I got it right. You can ,too. BREATHE.
SRI,
I'm going to have you look up and find the answer in an earlier comment; it's there... :)
HAVE FUN EVERYONE! I've about one more minute here.
Ms. LaBeau
Now i'm really freaking out man!!!!!
I forgot my book at school. is there a way to find it online and its contents? like an online book?
KEN, Seriously, the comments I left to Jack, will help you; he had body paragraph issues, too. I think he was working with MEL-CON. Look at the comment I last gave him about the paper and try it out.
The process helps to clear the head and focus your thinking a bit better.
Dude, no book on-line for you. Ouch. Maybe google the title (in quotes) to find the story; citing the page numbe would be a mess, but maybe you could hit the space bar a few times for it, look up the exact page tomorrow at school, and write it in the space.
ok. whats the name of the book?
THANKS A LOT
I am logging off shortly; you CAN answer one another's questions. I've seen and heard you do it. Help one another here.
I will leave one last comment soon.
like the actual English book itslef. not the story i'm doing for the paper.
Paxton, name of the story, not the book. You won't find the book on-line for the help you need. BUT you may find the short story on-line, the same short story as in your textbook.
augggg i cant get my paper that i wrote at school to come up on this computer so now i gotta totally restart my paper and i dont remember what i said in the last one i biked like 6 miles today so im tired and i dont know if id have enough time in study hall to finish the essay i already have almost done what should i do restart and have it be a bad paper or risk cramming it last minute to get a good paper
I got the qoute. thanks.
eric, what are you trying to do? that netstorage thing?
yea its not working what do i do
THIS IS MY FINAL POST.
Paxton, you are awesome for responding to Eric; Eric, maybe he can explain where you are having troubles. Netstorage (at the bottom of Fremd page) SHOULD work for you.
As per the question betwee the bad paper (restarted) and good paper (finish what you've already started), go for the good paper.
Netstorage is operating correctly....
paxton can you please tell tell me what to do for netstorage and is this the paxton from my spanish class?
eric, go the fremd webpage. then scroll down to the bottom and look for the link called Netstorage. click on it. it should open a new window with two beige links that say netsorage login 1 and netstorage login 2. i clicked on the number one. after you do that, it will bring you to an error page. on of the links at the bottom will be a link that says continue anyway. click on that. it will ask you for your user id and password. that is just your school login. type that in. it should take you to a screen that has your "h" drive and other stuff on it. click on the one that has your last name in it. just like you would at school. find your document you want. then double click on it. it might open a new window that is blank but at the top of it, it will say that it has blocked a pop up or whatever. RIGHT click on it and select download file. it will then open a download screen. click open and there you go. jsut remember to click the accept changes icon at the top of the document to save. the icon looks like a peice of paper witha pencil and a checkmark on it. food luck.
and yea. i'm in your spanish class.
eric u there
arggg it doesnt work it just not evening showing up and i know i saved it because that how ive gotten to the same document at school for the past 3 days so whatever i'll try finishing it in study hall i hope i finish it good luck to everyone writing their papers and thanks paxton for helping
did you get it yet eric?
is that you K.C?
no problem.
yah its me u twit
hows your paper coming along?!
this is easy once u get da hang of it
just finished mine and good for u jak
thx ken!!!!!!
well im in the media center now and i cant find my document so i think i may have saved it on the computer i was working on in room 121 so im going to attempt to make a new paper
How much is the paper worth?
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